Question

Исправьте пожалуйста ошибки в тексте, если они есть (текст должен быть в past simple) The second part returned to their adulthood. It awoke, and a series of child murders cause Mike, the town’s librarian, to call the group back together. They all agreed to return, except for Stan who slit his wrists rather than returned. Mike reminded them of the story, and they decided to kill It once and for all. It began to manipulate the minds of those around him, and it kidnaped some of their significant others. It appeared to them as their original fears, and they followed it to its lair. There, It almost killed them, but they performed the Ritual as in the first part. They managed to injure It severely, and they saved Bill from the Deadlights. They found that It had laid eggs, so they destroyed them, and Bill crushed It’s heart between his hands finally killed it. A massive storm swept through Maine, collapsing Derry’s downtown and they concluded that It’s influence had finally broke As they went through the next months, their memories began to fade, and they gradually forgot about It and each other. It and the town of Derry had finally died, ending the influence of the being once and for all.

Answer 1

The second part returned to their adulthood.  It awoke and a series of child murders caused Mike, the town’s librarian, to call the group back together. They all agreed to return except for Stan who slited his wrists rather than return.

Mike reminded them of the story and they decided to kill it once and for all. It began to manipulate the minds of those around him and it kidnaped some of their significant others. It appeared to them as their original fears and they followed it to its lair. There it almost killed them but they performed the Ritual as in the first part.

They managed to injure it severely and they saved Bill from the Deadlights. They found that it had laid eggs, so they destroyed them and Bill crushed it’s heart between his hands finally killed it. A massive storm swept through Maine, collapsing Derry’s downtown and they concluded that it’s influence had finally broke.

As they went through the next months, their memories began to fade and they gradually forgot about it and each other. It and the town of Derry had finally died, ending the influence of the being once and for all.

Много запятых , они расставленны как в рускком языке

В английском языке с этим проще.

Вы сами писали текст? Очень странная компоновка предложений, а так ошибки исправленны)

Answer 2

The second part returned to their adulthood. It awoke, and a series of child murders caused Mike, the town’s librarian, to call the group back together. They all agreed to return, except for Stan, who slit his wrists rather than return. Mike reminded them of the story, and they decided to kill It once and for all. It began to manipulate the minds of those around them, and it kidnapped some of their significant others. It appeared to them as their original fears, and they followed it to its lair. There, It almost killed them, but they performed the Ritual as in the first part. They managed to injure It severely, and they saved Bill from the Deadlights. They found that It had laid eggs, so they destroyed them, and Bill crushed Its heart between his hands, finally killing it. A massive storm swept through Maine, collapsing Derry’s downtown, and they concluded that Its influence had finally broken. As they went through the next months, their memories began to fade, and they gradually forgot about It and each other. It and the town of Derry had finally died, ending the influence of the being once and for all.