Question

Здравствуйте, исправьте, пожалуйста, ошибки в сочинении (все очень плохо с временами) One of the most important lessons I have learned in life was when I did my school project. I began to make the presentation to this the day before the defense. It was half past one when I have finished. I pressed the save button, but, suddenly, my computer stopped working. I managed to fix it only by rebooting. The presentation has been deleted. I felt myself very awful. Luckily, on the next day my mum agreed to help me. Together we made the presentation in one hour and I passed my project to the highest score. Afterwards, I have undestood, that time is precious and that we shouldn't put off till tomorrow, what we can do today.

Answer 1

разве не Learnt 3 форма этого глагола?
граммотнее будет - in MY life
presentation to this the day (to this я бы убрала)
I pressed the save button, but, suddenly, my computer stopped working( можно переделать с использованием времени, которое тут у тебя ни разу не встречалось, но это так, как вариант. у тебя тоже граммотно. - Suddenly, my computer stopped working when I was pressing the save button)
on the next day ( оn лишнее)

с временами у тебя всё в порядке, не наговаривай))) а  вот предлоги не очень любишь.

Answer 2

One of the most important lessons I have learned in life was when I did my school project. I began to make the presentation to this the day before the defense. It was half past one when I have finished. I pressed the save button, but, suddenly, my computer stopped working. I managed to fix it only by rebooting. The presentation has been deleted. I felt myself very awful. Luckily, on the next day my mum agreed to help me. Together we made the presentation in one hour and I passed my project to the highest score. Afterwards, I have understood, that time is precious and that we shouldn't put off till tomorrow, what we can do today.
У тебя с временами нормально. У тебя тут почти ошибок нет.

Answer 3

Я могу помочь вам исправить ошибки в вашем сочинении. Вот исправленный вариант:

One of the most important lessons I learned in life was when I did my school project. I began to make the presentation for it the day before the defense. It was half past one when I finished. I pressed the save button, but, suddenly, my computer stopped working. I managed to fix it only by rebooting. The presentation had been deleted. I felt very awful. Luckily, on the next day my mum agreed to help me. Together we made the presentation in one hour and I passed my project with the highest score. Afterwards, I understood that time is precious and that we shouldn't put off till tomorrow what we can do today.

Ваше сочинение содержит несколько ошибок в употреблении времен. Вот некоторые правила, которые вам помогут избежать их в будущем:

- Если вы рассказываете о событии, которое произошло в прошлом и закончилось в прошлом, используйте Past Simple. Например: I learned, I began, I finished, I pressed, I felt, I understood. - Если вы рассказываете о событии, которое произошло в прошлом до другого события в прошлом, используйте Past Perfect. Например: The presentation had been deleted (до того, как я перезагрузил компьютер). - Если вы рассказываете о событии, которое произошло в прошлом и имело результат в настоящем, используйте Present Perfect. Например: I have learned a lot from this experience (я по-прежнему помню этот урок).

Надеюсь, что это вам поможет. Удачи в учебе!