Question

8 класс. Можете исправить ошибки в английском варианте? Если что, текст на русском можно немного исправить, т.к. сочиняла сама. Welcome to Ufa.Now autumn. Weather is pleasant all residents of the city. The sun illuminates and warms. But recently on the streets covered with snow. Multi-colored leaves of the trees and the snow is beautiful isn't it? In this weather you can walk through the Park, exploring the streets, many houses will interest your curiosity. At night the city is beautiful. Shops signs, lights, headlamp machines - this is the only source of light. I think you'll like. Welcome to Ufa! Хотела написать на английском: Добро пожаловать в Уфу.Сейчас осень. Погода радует всех жителей города. Солнце освещает и согревает. Но совсем недавно на улицах города лежал снег. Разноцветные листья деревьев и снег, красиво не так ли? В такую погоду можно прогуляться по парку, осмотреть улицы, многие дома будут интересны вашему любопытству. Ночью город прекрасен. Вывески магазинов, фонари, фары машин - это единственный источник света. Я думаю, что вам понравится. Приезжайте в Уфу!

Answer 1

It is autumn now. 
Park с маленькой лучше написать, я так думаю. 
"В такую погоду можно прогуляться по парку, осмотреть улицы, многие дома будут интересны вашему любопытству." Так не говорят, можно заменить это предложение на "В такую погоду можно прогуляться по парку, осмотреть улицы, многие дома привлекут ваше внимание"
In this weather you can walk through the park, explore city streets. Many houses would attract your attention.
I think you would like it. Come in Ufa. 
Welcome - добро пожаловать, ну никак не приезжайте! 

Answer 2

Английский вариант:

Welcome to Ufa. It's autumn now. The weather is pleasing to all the city's residents. The sun illuminates and warms. But recently, the streets were covered with snow. The multicolored leaves of the trees and the snow are beautiful, aren't they? In this weather, you can take a walk through the park, explore the streets, and many houses will pique your curiosity. At night, the city is beautiful. Shop signs, lights, and car headlights are the only sources of light. I think you'll like it. Welcome to Ufa!

Русский вариант:

Добро пожаловать в Уфу. СейчДобро пожаловать в Уфу! Сейчас осень, и погода радует всех жителей города. Солнце освещает и согревает. Но совсем недавно на улицах города лежал снег. Разноцветные листья деревьев и снег создают красивую картину, не так ли? В такую погоду можно прогуляться по парку, осмотреть улицы. Многие дома будут интересны вашему любопытству.

Ночью город прекрасен. Вывески магазинов, фонари и фары машин - это единственный источник света. Я думаю, что вам понравится Уфа. Приезжайте в Уфу!

Translation:

Welcome to Ufa! It is currently autumn, and the weather is pleasant for all residents of the city. The sun illuminates and warms. But recently, there was snow on the streets of the city. The colorful leaves of the trees and the snow create a beautiful scene, don't they? In this weather, you can take a walk in the park, explore the streets. Many houses will pique your curiosity.

The city is beautiful at night. The signs of shops, streetlights, and car headlights are the only source of light. I think you will like it. Come to Ufa!

Now, let's take a look at the English version you provided and make some corrections:

"Welcome to Ufa. Now autumn. Weather is pleasant for all residents of the city. The sun illuminates and warms. But recently on the streets covered with snow. Multi-colored leaves of the trees and the snow, beautiful, isn't it? In this weather, you can walk through the park, exploring the streets. Many houses will interest your curiosity. At night, the city is beautiful. Shops signs, lights, headlights of machines - this is the only source of light. I think you'll like. Welcome to Ufa!"

Here is the corrected version:

"Welcome to Ufa! It is currently autumn, and the weather is pleasant for all residents of the city. The sun illuminates and warms. But recently, there was snow on the streets. The colorful leaves of the trees and the snow, beautiful, isn't it? In this weather, you can take a walk through the park, explore the streets. Many houses will pique your curiosity. At night, the city is beautiful. Signs of shops, lights, and car headlights - these are the only sources of light. I think you will like it. Welcome to Ufa!"

I made a few corrections to improve the grammar and clarity of the English version.