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Проверьте пожалуйста сочинение по английскому языку( Для ГИА). Dear John, It was great to hear from you! Sorry that I haven’t written you for so long but I was busy all this time.Great news about your visit to the Niagara Falls. I want to tell to you about beautiful Lake Baikal. Baikal is the largest freshwater lake by volume in the world, containing roughly 20% of the world's unfrozen surface fresh water. Baikal is the world's deepest lake. It is considered among the world's clearest lakes and is considered the world's oldest lake. I never was on the lake Baikal but, I dream to visit this beautiful place. I have never gone rafting, I think it is a dangerous. I do not like extreme sports, I prefer quiet hobbies lake a reading or needlework. Why we are going to Israel this summer ?What will you do when you arrive to Israel?Do you know anything about Jewish traditions? Well, I’d better go now as I have to do my homework. Drop me a letter when you can. Best wishes, Mira

Answer 1

Дорогой Джон,Это было здорово услышать от вас! Жаль, что я не писал тебе так долго, но я был занят все это время.Отличная новость о вашем посещении Ниагарского водопада.Я хочу рассказать вам о прекрасном озере . Байкал является самым большим пресноводным озером по объему в мире, содержащих около 20% мирового незамерзшей поверхности воды. Байкал-самое глубокое озеро в мире. Он считается одним из чистейших озер в мире и считается древнейшим озером в мире. Я никогда не был на Байкале, но мечтаю посетить это прекрасное место. Я никогда не сплавлялся, я думаю, что это опасно. Я не люблю экстремальные виды спорта, я предпочитаю тихое озеро увлечения чтением или рукоделием.Почему мы идем этим летом в Израиль ?Что вы будете делать, когда вы приедете в Израиль?Вы знаете что-нибудь о еврейских традициях?Ну, я лучше пойду теперь, как я должен делать мою домашнюю работу.Напишите мне письмо, когда вы можете. Наилучшие пожелания, Мира

Answer 2

To hear you; visit to Niagara falls; i want to tell you about one (или a) beautiful; i haven't been to lake Baikal but (только одно but); i prefer less dangerous hobbies like reading and needlework; why are we (а, может, why are you?) going; i'd better to go now because…

Answer 3

Your composition is generally good, but there are a few suggestions for improvement. Here's an edited version of your letter:

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Dear John,

It was great to hear from you! I apologize for not writing to you for so long; I've been quite busy. Congratulations on the exciting news about your visit to Niagara Falls.

I'd like to share some information about the beautiful Lake Baikal with you. Baikal is the largest freshwater lake by volume in the world, containing roughly 20% of the world's unfrozen surface freshwater. Moreover, it is the world's deepest lake, considered among the clearest, and is also recognized as the world's oldest lake. Although I have never been to Lake Baikal, I dream of visiting this breathtaking place.

Unlike you, I have never tried rafting as I perceive it to be a bit dangerous. I'm not a fan of extreme sports; instead, I prefer quieter hobbies like reading or needlework.

I'm curious about our summer plans to visit Israel. What inspired the choice, and what do you plan to do once you arrive? Do you have any knowledge of Jewish traditions?

I must wrap this up as I need to attend to my homework. Please drop me a letter whenever you can.

Best wishes,

Mira

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