Question

Можете проверить, правильно ли составлен текст на английском языке?Therefore our research group suggests to make Leninsk-Kuznetsky the tourist city. We want to make our city the focus of celebration of Russian folk festivals such as Maslenitsa, Easter, Ivan Kupala, and others. We think that such tourism will draw many foreigners . Now my colleagues will in more detail tell about our idea..... We hope that you will appreciate our idea and provide a grant for implementation of this project.

Answer 1

1. "Now my colleagues will in more detail tell about our idea"
Надо сказать так:      Now my colleagues will be told more detailed about our idea.

2. В остальном — всё правильно, но пропущены 2 запятые.
Для наглядности я подчеркнул 2 слова, между которыми должна быть запятая. 



Therefore, our research group suggests to make Leninsk-Kuznetsky the tourist city. We want to make our city the focus of celebration of Russian folk festivals,such as Maslenitsa, Easter, Ivan Kupala, and others. We think that such tourism will draw many foreigners . Now my colleagues will in more detail tell about our idea..... We hope that you will appreciate our idea and provide a grant for implementation of this project.

Answer 2

Конечно, вот переработанный текст на английском языке:

"Therefore, our research group proposes transforming Leninsk-Kuznetsky into a tourist destination. We aim to position our city as a focal point for celebrating Russian folk festivals such as Maslenitsa, Easter, Ivan Kupala, and others. We believe that promoting this kind of tourism will attract a significant number of foreigners. My colleagues will now provide further details about our idea. We hope that you will appreciate our proposal and consider providing a grant to support the implementation of this project."

Текст внес некоторые изменения, чтобы сделать предложения более грамотными и легче воспринимаемыми на английском языке.