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Проверьте пожалуйста правильность написания, грамматики и орфографии Self-introduction Hello! Let me introduce my self! My name is Daniel, I am a young and ambitious person. After graduation from High School I continued studying at the Pedagogical College. And in 2017 I received a diploma in the specialty of teacher. While studying in college, I worked as an English teacher an a kindergarten for children aged 3 to 6 years. After graduation from College I continued to work with children, but at the hotel. In the hotel I worked as a children’s museum animator. Teaching is my passion. I love working with kids. I can write a lesson plan and design new games and activities. In between and after me studies I traveled all around the world and during my 20-s I visited more the 13 countries . I recently visited Beijing and I really liked this city. I love China, as it is one of the biggest countries in the world, with an extremely: rich culture, friendly people and beautiful landscapes. There is so much more to see for me and therefore I’d like to become an English teacher in China. So I can share my knowledge, skills and positive energy at yours school. Thank you for your attention!

Answer 1

Self-introduction
Hello! Let me introduce my self! My name is Daniel, I am a young and ambitious person.
After graduation from High School I continued studying at the Pedagogical College. And in 2017 I received a diploma in the speciality of teacher. While studying in college, I worked as an English teacher an a kindergarten for children aged  from 3 to 6 years. After graduation from College I continued to work with children, but at the hotel. In the hotel I worked as a children’s museum animator.
Teaching is my passion. I love working with kids. I can write a lesson plan and design new games and activities. In between and after my studies I traveled all around the world and during my 20 years I visited more than  13 countries . I recently visited Beijing and I really liked this city. 
I love China, because  it is one of the biggest countries in the world, with an extremely: rich culture, friendly people and beautiful landscapes. There is so much more to see for me and therefore I’d like to become an English teacher in China. 
So I can share my knowledges, skills and positive energy at your school. Thank you for your attention!


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Answer 2

Your self-introduction has a few grammatical and spelling errors. Here's a corrected version:

Self-Introduction

Hello! Let me introduce myself. My name is Daniel, and I am a young and ambitious individual. After graduating from high school, I continued my studies at the Pedagogical College. In 2017, I received a diploma in the specialty of teaching. While studying in college, I worked as an English teacher at a kindergarten for children aged 3 to 6 years. After graduating from college, I continued to work with children, but in a hotel. In the hotel, I worked as a children's museum animator. Teaching is my passion, and I love working with kids. I can create lesson plans and design new games and activities.

In between and after my studies, I traveled all around the world, and during my twenties, I visited more than 13 countries. I recently visited Beijing, and I really liked the city. I love China because it is one of the biggest countries in the world, with an extremely rich culture, friendly people, and beautiful landscapes. There is so much more for me to see, and that's why I'd like to become an English teacher in China, so I can share my knowledge, skills, and positive energy at your school.

Thank you for your attention!