Question

Привет! Помогиете с мини-сочинением по английскому. Укажите на ошибки. Как можно лучше написать, что добавить, что убрать. In free time I usually go to the river Kuban. This place isn't far from my home. There is quiet, calm and there are no people. I like to sit on the beach and look at water surface. I often draw or read there. Sometimes I came there with my friends. We can talk, play something or build a sand castle together. We always have a good time there. I love this spot, because I feel calm and well there.

Answer 1

In free time I usually go to the river Kuban. This place doesn't far from my home. Here are quiet, calm and there aren't people. I like to sit on the beach and look at water surface. I often draw or read here.  Sometimes I come to this beach with my friends. We can talk, play something or build a sand castle together. We always have a good time here.  I love this spot, because I feel calm and well here.

Да уж. Везде написано There, но по смыслу должно быть here.There - Где-то что-то есть. Here - здесь, тут. Спроси у учительницы как правильно, или посмотри в переводчике. Просто твой текст на 3-

Удачи!

Answer 2

Привет! Вот исправленная версия твоего мини-сочинения:

During my free time, I usually go to the Kuban River. This place isn't far from my home. It's quiet, calm, and devoid of people. I enjoy sitting on the beach and gazing at the water's surface. I often draw or read while I'm there. Sometimes I go with my friends, and we can talk, play games, or even build sand castles together. We always have a great time. I love this spot because it makes me feel calm and content.

Вот некоторые объяснения к внесенным изменениям:

1. "In free time" заменено на "During my free time" - это более естественное выражение.
2. "River Kuban" заменено на "Kuban River" - порядок слов изменен на более типичный для английского языка.
3. "There is quiet, calm and there are no people" заменено на "It's quiet, calm, and devoid of people" - это более грамматически правильная фраза.
4. "Look at water surface" заменено на "Gaze at the water's surface" - более художественное и точное выражение.
5. "Sometimes I came there with my friends" заменено на "Sometimes I go with my friends" - использован правильный глагол для настоящего времени.
6. "We can talk, play something or build a sand castle together" заменено на "We can talk, play games, or even build sand castles together" - добавлены разнообразные активности для большего разнообразия.
7. "We always have a good time there" заменено на "We always have a great time" - используется более сильное и эмоциональное слово.
8. "Because I feel calm and well there" заменено на "Because it makes me feel calm and content" - более точное выражение чувств.

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