Question

Помогите пожалуйста. Есть ли ошибки в письме? Спасибо большое, заранее) Weather in my town changeable. The best time of year in Moscow - spring. Flowers bloom, the grass turns green, the sun comes in the sky. The weather is warm and sunny. In my town you can visit many interesting places. When the snow melted, the park rides open. We can look at the beautiful views. In late spring you can swim in the river. I love my city at any time of year, but it is especially beautiful in spring. Come to me in the spring!

Answer 1

Weather is changeable in my city. The best time of year in Moscow - spring.
Flowers bloom, the grass turns green, the sun comes in the sky. The weather is warm and sunny. In my city you can visit many interesting places. When the snow melts, the park rides open. Then we can see beautiful views. In late spring you can swim in the river. I love my city at any time of year, but it is especially beautiful in spring. Come and see me in the spring!

Answer 2

Вот исправленное письмо:

The weather in my town is changeable. The best time of the year in Moscow is spring. Flowers bloom, the grass turns green, and the sun shines in the sky. The weather is warm and sunny. In my town, you can visit many interesting places. When the snow melts, the park rides open, and we can enjoy beautiful views. In late spring, you can even swim in the river. I love my city at any time of the year, but it is especially beautiful in spring. Come visit me in the spring!

Примечания:

• Заменил "comes" на "shines", чтобы лучше передать смысл.
• Исправил "look at" на "enjoy", чтобы выразить большее удовольствие.
• Добавил "even" перед "swim" для усиления эффекта.
• Добавил "visit me" для лучшего смысла последнего предложения.