Question

ПРОВЕРЬТЕ ГРАММАТИКУ В ЭССЕ! *** People say that the advantages of living in a big city definitely outweigh the benefits of country life. I'm one of those who prefer city. There's more diversity in leisure time: clubs, festivals, exhibitions, internet, ect. It is easier to make money than in the countryside. In the city of more people - more singles and more communication. It does not waste time growing food, less worries about the economy. Easier with hot water, toilets, electricity, heat, the ability to wash, to cook food. Simply create an opportunity for an appropriate education. Life in the village has a whole other advantages. You can listen to loud music, burn fires, not afraid to disturb anyone. If serious attention to farming, not only can feed itself, but also to produce food, feed others. And getting to that income. The city has some tightness, which presses psychologically makes people angry. The village is more spacious and less stress. It may, of course, something I have not taken into account, life is diverse, about everything at once can not remember, but until I inclined to think that my work is yet to be concentrated in the city. Or must be at least an opportunity to quickly get to the city. In conclusion I want to say that no matter what you choose (town or village) it will be your own decision, based solely on your preferences and comfort.

Answer 1

Хочу сказать, что очень хорошее эссе.
Довольно граммотно написано, только хочу сделать замечание: вы слишком часто употребляете "it" в начале предложения, замените любим другим словом.

Answer 2

*** People say that the advantages of living in a big city definitely outweigh the benefits of country life. I'm one of those who prefer the city. There's more diversity in leisure time: clubs, festivals, exhibitions, the internet, etc. It is easier to make money than in the countryside. In the city, there are more people, more singles, and more opportunities for communication. There is no need to waste time growing food, and there are fewer worries about the economy. It is easier to access amenities like hot water, toilets, electricity, and heating, as well as the ability to wash and cook food. The city simply provides better opportunities for obtaining an appropriate education.

Life in the village has its own advantages. You can listen to loud music, burn fires, and not be afraid of disturbing anyone. If one pays serious attention to farming, they can not only feed themselves but also produce food to feed others and generate income. The city can feel cramped, leading to psychological pressure and making people irritable. The village, on the other hand, offers more space and less stress.

Of course, there may be factors I haven't taken into account. Life is diverse, and it's impossible to remember everything at once. However, I am inclined to think that my work should be concentrated in the city or at least provide the opportunity to quickly travel to the city. In conclusion, I want to say that regardless of your choice (city or village), it will be your own decision based solely on your preferences and comfort.